the last line.. so nycccc <3 <3 <3

aw good one ❤

this is so nice.. i mean so wild and kinda so not usual.. keep up :D

wahh this is so nice.. its like i actually flew away in one of ur fantasy worlds vishnuuuu... :p stars in daylight?? ughh so beautifull loved ittt :)

aww such a nice feeling n full of emotions :)

this is so deep.. :)

niceeee o.O

aww the bell lol..nicely doneee :)

so beautiful 0.0

hahah lol absolutely not huntress xD jk lol this was really really sweet.. keep up loved the flowww ^-^

gawd this happpens.. *sigh this is so painful :(

loving the 5th stanza.. but hey u shud enter the poem in the lyric poem competition tht u find at the end of ur poem.. u have to put a park over it to enter ur poem.. do it before the timer else it wont be counted.. :)

ahhh i see... goodieee :)

nicely done :)

minor grammar mistakes but the idea and the rhyme is totally great.. good job and best of luck :)

EPIC DAVID!! well expressed :)

short and sweet :)

aww i see :P

this is done so beautifulllyyyy

wahhh dont tell me its all real o.O

AWED JUST SIMPLY AWED. how could u instill no i mean really how couldya insert so much like so muchhhhhhh emotion in this one simple story? gahhh i love it to the moon and back.. the bestest that ever got up on typotic.. u need a thousand pats to make u realise what a masterpiece u have written =D wonderful superb excellent and all those stuff are really not enuf but i hope adding it to my faves says some part of it.. God u got me hooked :)

well expressed.. enjoyed the entire ride and loved the ending ofccc... =D keepp upp donuttt :P

lol if only :D

lol most welcomeeee

haha lovey dovey back xD

lol hahah xD ill eat the bunch :P

gahhh u cruella abby cabby... it was so emotional.. loved it to the bone marrows :(