Story retold from Ebi's point of view

Sweet little love story

Please read my presentation 'Simons story ' and give your comments

I can feel the raw emotions and the hurt - a candle has to burn to give light - wonderful!

Home is where the heart is!

For a first timer great poem

Interesting story nice at you have brought out the rivalry between the sisters

Moral beat up the guy but do not break any body part

Good one!

Nice little story! Keep writing!

Nicely written keep writing!

Nice story horror built up initially and lightened in the end! Waiting for some more!

Adolescent years and crushes painful. Nicely described

If the number of characters were cut down, it would have been even more enjoyable I guess. But quite engrossing!

Nice poetry - sensuous!

From innocence to cynicism- life in short

All you work have a nice and positive feel in them . People with this kind of positive mind frame makes this world a beautiful place to live in!

Nice you have brought out the Halloween spirit quite well

Why so sad?

A person will be truly beautiful when they are beautiful from inside as well as outside - well written

Sad little story but happens all the time! When will our society change for the better!

Thanks for your wonderful comment - you made my day!

Sad and sweet little love story I liked it very much

I feel a lot of pain after reading this. How can people be so cruel to their pets? Very moving writing

I also like S R K . Best and most intelligent of the three khans

A bit like a esop fable quite nice and feel good factor is there

Good attempt