Very interesting, it always amazes me how things change around us. I don't like to criticise, I am not the best writer there is, but like Manahil said, grammar, characters. Your environment. How does it look where you live, where your parents live, for example. What the ADDA looks like, what kind of people visit it, only men, woman? I am very curious, I would like to know this now? What kind of work does the parents do? What does the guy in the story look like? (read my Betrayal of The Innocent - part 1). :-)

Kazue this is so beautiful, I absolutely love animals. I cannot even watch a animation movie where animals get lost. Read my, who am I.

Beautiful, and so true...

Nice one, when you said what you wanted, it's fine, short or loooooooong.......... I wish I was better with writing poems.... .

Very sweet and so true...... (and thanks for the up votes on my story's)

Sorry, thanks for the up vote xx

Thank you, happy that you enjoy it. I was thinking: the whole of these first parts are about who the character's are, to understand them and for the reader to get to know Jennifer, to understand her, the reasons for her betrayal. (It's like it should have been the first chapter if it was a book.) Do you think I should say something in the description about that or not? I am scared people will get bored.

You honestly need to get some to publish your poems. Hope every one understands what you are saying....

Thanks, hopefully it means good writing. thanks for all your up votes.

I love your poem, is it about something specific, or just a poem in general? it makes me think of a lot of things happening around me.

Thank you my friend, it says a lot to me. You want to make me cry....love you for this. I agree, it is what make you happy, not what you have. My dream is to see the world, not have expensive things, hope we will meet someday.

Sad and nice. I like the way you used your words.

Thank you, love you too, and thanks for the up vote and adding it to your favourites. xxxx

Thumbs up!!!!! where do you get all your ideas? I love your work.

This makes me think of myself..... very nice story

Geez, because you write so good...... :-)

You write very interesting story's. Very different and enjoyable :-)

Just joking sharmishta, read my poem Ashamed.....maybe then you will understand....

Nope........ a land far and beyond....... Hehehehe seven seas away, then you turn left, take a right turn and left and then you ask there for directions!!!!!

Crazyyyyyyyyyyyy great!!!!!!!!!! Where did you get that darn ugly picture? you are a very good writer (dotdotdot)........

Now that is what I need!!!! I will print it out and put it on my fridge. Thanks purpletears xxx

beautiful!!!!!!

Goodness, I was waiting for him to be the serial killer...... it is a very good story and a lesson well learned. I hope the men read and listen... :-)

I hope that girl is his wife..... well written

I think it is so cute.... I don't know why..... it is just: I can imagine myself being one of them.

Thank you and thanks for the up vote xx

Life is hectic, hubby is having a big operation in two weeks. My baby start school next year. Time to write, to run a house. Washing!!!! Ironing!!! Cleaning!!! Dust...... My writing makes me feel better, I love to write, I never ever had any one believing that I have any talent what so ever to write. I must have written a million things in my mind and a million more, that i just deleted........... :-)