gore! omg! what a very creepy imagination you have...reading your story reminds me of goosebumps tv show...btw...great work...

i agree...sweet and exciting love story...could'nt wait to find out what will happen next...

oh my god! it's creepy amd chilling indeed!

yyou could do it! don't ever think you can't.. btw, thanks for your conment and upvotes

thanks sharmish . .maybe next timr i'l reread it for errors...if not for the damn cursor....lol...i almost cringed after re-reading it.. thanks anyway for appreciating the story

sweet and funny, though I have to omit the "harder" word...(laughs)

thanks velantra....(sobs)..truth is my husband actually owns the pc and the priviledge to use it...i'm praying he'll give iy to me(lol)

thanks sortofw...actually grammar is one of my enemy as I've mentioned in my early poems. .and sorry about the spelling. .i used handheld device (cp) which make it hard for me to edit my work...my cp is lagging and refuses to move its cursor on my desired poaition...but thanks for the upvote

thanks kl95! im glad you like my poem...

thanks kaylee!

sweet and comforting!

probably bexause 1 he's too young then to remember it 2 they erased the memories from his mind 3 he had long-term amnesia 4 i don't really know...hehe any clue

jay seemd to went down the memory lane a.k.a lily..but what has the bottle and needle got to do with him? and why is he screaming in the truck?

intense! i can feel your deep hopes and emotions...great job!

nice story and I'm beginning to like that clock...obedient and unassuming efficient clock!

yeah...we are so full of questions....is it really their dad who killed her?and whoever did that, why? what is the reason? maybe you could enlighten our minds by publishing a part two of this...am i right?...but...i like your story, exciting and full of suspense..keep it up!

you also have a good story to tell...like most people would say...read and practice and practice writing...i know you'll be able to make your work better..anyway I like the values of your story...

cute, nice and lovely!

you got that right purple t

wow too rekhan! i am flattered with your comments...gee..thanks...

thanks velantra! and yeah just keep on smiling friend!

meaningful and very daring! atta girl!

yeah...it's only a nightmare...and the monster too with all it's ugly description.nice work

thanks a ton joy for your feedback and upvote

thanks velantra! i'm glad you say that..it means you felt my poem..

thanks velantra! im glad you also can relate to my poem

thanks rekhan..you've really appreciate my poem...that means a lot to me