i really liked the plot.. Though you still have slight tense probs.. i liked the details of the story too :) keep up and keep on improving :D :) :)

so warm :o can i quote this when i feel like it :P??

I DID! X_X

FRRR FRRR FRIGHTEENNNIINGGG... lol great writing indeed :D :D loved the description.. preeetyyy weird story though :p weird is good ya know xD

scary indeeedddd :D *shudders* goood work :D

hehe i still havent made up my mind :/ :P

impressssiiveee writinggg !! :D

haha no prob :D

hmm lemme tell u.. it is SCHOOOLLL gah since it started, i havent posted anythng :/ i hope i cud get some ideas for the competition though :D

ur welcome :D yea longggg time :D

haha no prob :D

very very impressive :)

haahha enjoyed the rideeee and loooveddd the ending.. superbbb :D

LOL whoaaa awesomeeee :D :D i mena theres that pinch of weird scareness and then that thrill mixed with a funny element in the end.. the last dialogue LOL loved ittttt .. oone of the bestttsss <3 <3

hahah such a quick, short and warmmm story... loveeddd ittt goood jobbb <3 <3

i agree with the above comments.. could do with some work in description, tenses and character building .. liked the plot though :)

i think i do :D

most welcome

so cute <3

why cant it's me for you.. i wonder what it means exactly

immensely creative :)

woahhh good workk :)))

so beautiful :)

good work indeed.. liked it :)

surely :)

aww this was so beautiful.. it reflects the reality so clearly. good work indeed :) <3

well written.. good job :D