August 15, 2015
Please Court Me Again, If the Feelings are still there
This is a bit soapy. Found it along with my old notes :D Taaaahh, written during a lot of years ago and decide to post it here.
Please Court Me Again, If the Feelings are still there
by samewriter
It was a typical day
I am in the corner of our room
And soon you enter and gaze around.
You came close to me,
But I never looked up
For I am in chaos by that time.
Later you hold my hand
Ask me a question
“Is there any chances for me?”
I definitely answered “No.”
You are persistent and ask me again,
There, and again is a no.
You have walked away
As I continue to think
So many stuff that are bothering me.
Out of the blue, what you have said
Came across to my mind
And it added up, to the things that bother me.
As we get along as friends
I have known you more
What is real in you.
Fun and happy to be with
Somehow, I have fallen for you
For you never fail to make feel important.
I have been treasured by you
I suppose
Because you make me feel special.
There at the library
You sit by me,
Talk about some random stuff.
“Have someone already caught your heart?”
You asked.
I rattled but managed to mumble an answer.
“That only causes me trouble.”
I answered, but I was suppose to say
“Are you courting me again?”
“Yeah, I suppose as well”.
I was disappointed by your answer
For I thought you are still persistent.
I want to cry but things are my fault
I try to cover my face with the book I am holding
Try to read and comprehend.
Maybe I’ll just keep on waiting
But please court me again,
If the feelings are still there.
I am in the corner of our room
And soon you enter and gaze around.
You came close to me,
But I never looked up
For I am in chaos by that time.
Later you hold my hand
Ask me a question
“Is there any chances for me?”
I definitely answered “No.”
You are persistent and ask me again,
There, and again is a no.
You have walked away
As I continue to think
So many stuff that are bothering me.
Out of the blue, what you have said
Came across to my mind
And it added up, to the things that bother me.
As we get along as friends
I have known you more
What is real in you.
Fun and happy to be with
Somehow, I have fallen for you
For you never fail to make feel important.
I have been treasured by you
I suppose
Because you make me feel special.
There at the library
You sit by me,
Talk about some random stuff.
“Have someone already caught your heart?”
You asked.
I rattled but managed to mumble an answer.
“That only causes me trouble.”
I answered, but I was suppose to say
“Are you courting me again?”
“Yeah, I suppose as well”.
I was disappointed by your answer
For I thought you are still persistent.
I want to cry but things are my fault
I try to cover my face with the book I am holding
Try to read and comprehend.
Maybe I’ll just keep on waiting
But please court me again,
If the feelings are still there.
Manahill Naik
August 17, 2015 - 20:56 BRILLIANT <3 lovedddd itttt to the mooonnn and baccckkk :D
15 COMMENTS
nupur27
August 15, 2015 - 05:55 It's kinda me in there!!! Felt it to the core!!samewriter
August 15, 2015 - 16:26 ayyyiiieee, i never expect you will like, hahaha it is some sort of those puppy love stuff, but thanks :))) so glad you like it :Drekhanshiraghava
August 15, 2015 - 06:02 This is a master writing..... Superb.. i can feel the connect.... Just wow.... Loved itsamewriter
August 15, 2015 - 16:28 woooaaah, i never thought you would found it goodieeee :D aight, thanks a lot rehka :Daniketnikhade
August 16, 2015 - 09:27 The poem has got a few elements which need attention. The poem is very well written and it works very well. After reading the poem the first thing that came to mind is the term "Reciprocate", followed by "Reversal" and then subject to change are my feelings, emotions and thought process. This line "As we get along as friends" needs to be checked and changed. The same line can be written as "When we get along as friends". This is then followed by the last line which states "If the feelings are still there." The same line can be written as "If the feelings are still the same" After reading the poem I remembered of a tennis ball game which is usually played quite often by youngesters. Based on the game all I want to say is the there is a scope for editing the lines and including new words and excluding the old ones. This is because the thought process is clear, the direction is proper and the way in which everything needs to be mentioned is very well know. So why not take the next step. Thus the tennis ball is thrown against the wall and it will definitely return back to you as you are the only one who is playing the entire game. A very well written poem.samewriter
August 16, 2015 - 13:58 Aight, thanks for reading aniketnikhade. For the points from above comment, I do get it and will keep it in mind. For the mean time, I'll just keep my poem that way and apply those I have learned the next time I write. Thanks a lot really. I really appreciate it. :D P.S. I bet you are a professional editor. :)mischievousPrincess
August 17, 2015 - 06:00 geeee love it ! <3 it sounds realistic ... bet It happened to you ? ... :)samewriter
August 17, 2015 - 18:49 hahaha, somehow :P anyways, thanks for reading and the upvote as well :DmischievousPrincess
August 18, 2015 - 02:13 your welcome :) ^^ I hope he'll court you again :) or maybe just tell him :) ^^ <3samewriter
August 18, 2015 - 16:03 haha, it is way back a lot of years ago, and it is not that I have fallen for me, we become best of friends. The falling in love part is dome sort of imaginative story. And I don't really know if where he is right now mischievousPrincess :)mischievousPrincess
August 19, 2015 - 05:25 that's a beautiful experience ... something you could tell when you grow up :)Cyneburg's Field
August 17, 2015 - 17:35 awwwwwwwsamewriter
August 17, 2015 - 18:50 whhhuuuuuuuuuutttttttt????