Ok it's a story of young around 28 year old guy , he is well settle in MNC , He has good money to spend, good circles, livongs Standards, he lives 500km away from his family, family in which parents only ,"“ALARMS- good morning "...good morning , it's 4 am ....guys suddenly wake ups ..and he is very happy too, why because today finally after 5 years of job life , he is going for vacation, for hometown, he is really happy , talking himself..."" Hurry up ...hurry up...omg ...hurry up " he has a flight 8 am sharp...30 km run , traffic...finally guy now at airport, 1 hour before, he is excited , excited to meet old friends, his childhood love, his hometown, school college everything , he is messaging to his friends, replied- welcome brother we all are waiting. Finally 11 am same day ...he is finally in his hometown..looking everywhere with joy n happiness, no one came yet, 11:30 no one..finally after trying phone call one replied, sorry for trouble, see you at eve, so guy having no problem at all , he is still very happy..TAXI- and way to home..seeing his town from window, still beautiful but no more old streets, small roads, no more old shops , no bicycles no rickshaws, no old buildings, no open grounds , even no old school building , he is sad but smiling too because still happiness of ... 12:20 pm, he is at his home, very emotional moment ,and get a notes - “welcome hero, we are at job see you in eve , lunch on table, take rest , ' neighbour having key , love mom dad .no matter he is happy because his childhood love is his neighbour, '“ yesssss wow , hehe sweetheart I am coming ” ting tong - DOOR BELL . Hello uncle NAMASTE ( Indian way of wishing) how are you...o welcome son welcome, common come inside,please sit, guy is surprised , because once upon time this men is his biggest terror, but today afer 5 years later, how he is changed, but anyway let it be , it's really good welcoming after all , both are talking generally, sudden guy ask a men for his daughter ( his childhood love )'and without being angry,he says ,““ she is absolutely fine dear, nowadays pregnant, Oss you don't know last year she got married, o whatta family she got, very rich and genuine people they are...thanks god ""now very first time guy is upset n broken , guys takes key and came out , see you uncle, thanks. Inside his room he is sad thinking that once upon a time she always used to message me ,calls me ,lettered me..always used to welcomes me but this times, he is thinking and sad from last 2/3 hours, finally he stands up , time to go outside , hang out , party yeahhh.. Time to meet buddies, he is getting ready, time to go old ADDA ( a place where you meet and visit daily with your friends) 4:45 pm , he don't wait for parents and suddenly comes to adda, he is the first person who came first , he is excited, again no one , after waiting an hour , his friends comes,,,every one cheers everyone happy, 10/15 minutes, and then normal, nothing extra, nothing to talk, guys feels little bad that' his friends talking about business and jobs only , talking About nation issues and politics but no talking like old days no fun , no kidding, guy is sad and silent, giving fake smiles and showing his comfort ness, ok time to move on , one friend says ““common it's very late , 8'pm friends, we should move to home now ""now this time limit cross to guy, surplus amount of insult.. He stands and starts his car , without see off to anybody , he is back on the way to home ....driving fastly..but suddenly saw school building, not in good condition, not in use anymore, he stops and sits in his playground...guy is really alone now, very sad and angry , he has no one, no old towns , no old friends, no childhood love , he is completely upset, after 3 hours 11:00 pm he calls his mom, and shouts , why didn't you call me, you don't love me care me anymore, I just hate you,after little silence mom cut down phone, 11:15 again on the ways to home now, thinking- everything , everyone , every relations , every values and morals changes , he is upset with everything everyone, he is abusing everything everyone, laughing on his neighbour, crying for childhood love , hating friends,hating parents, hating almost everything everyone.12:00 am after entering home guy suddenly shocked to see, to see which is never thought, expected, that his parents are extremely tired and sleepy, but they are waiting for him on dining table for dinner in a half sleep stage from last 4 hours, they're hungry,tired and sleepy, but they are awakening yet....guy - O God, he is in guilt, but also in love and respect now, thanking god , to parents, he is crying, hugging, kisses to parents, saying sorry and love to mom dad ...I love you , love you so much .
MESSAGE BY STORY- we thinks we love ourself most, but always remember our parents love is always 9 months more than our love , they starts loving you 9 months before from the date of your birth.
MORAL OF THE STORY- everything yes each and everything is changeable in this world except changes, incomplete sentence
Complete sentence- each and every thing is changeable in this world except changes and parents love, parents love is CONSTANT.
THANKS AND LOVE
yours - ADEETYA KSHATRIYA
12 COMMENTS
Manahill Naik
June 25, 2015 - 13:24 okay so i really like the message in the story,..the moral is really good.. but there are some grammar errors and sometimes its hard to understand what ure trying to say... you can always work on your writing style... besides u could go for some details too.. and its always good to name ur character other than addressing him as the 'guy'.. best of luck.. and keep up :) :) :)ADEETYA KSHATRIYA
June 25, 2015 - 14:25 What a true person with true commentADEETYA KSHATRIYA
June 25, 2015 - 13:40 Wowwwwww....what a true commentManahill Naik
June 26, 2015 - 11:49 oh hahah my pleasure.. keep on writing ill get truer every time xDMahoobee
June 25, 2015 - 14:02 Hey, The moral is pretty good. :D Just a lil work on your spellings and write your thoughts a bit more clearly :) Give your characters name it brings them to life :DADEETYA KSHATRIYA
June 25, 2015 - 14:24 Hmmmm thanks mahobeeMahoobee
June 25, 2015 - 14:25 Your very welcome. :Dpurpletears
June 25, 2015 - 16:16 Quite good story. Thank you very much for sharing it with us.ADEETYA KSHATRIYA
June 25, 2015 - 23:29 Thanks a lot..for reading and commentSoumyadip Ray
June 28, 2015 - 11:18 I liked it. good jobADEETYA KSHATRIYA
June 28, 2015 - 20:37 Thanks SoumyadipVelantra
November 17, 2015 - 07:52 Very interesting, it always amazes me how things change around us. I don't like to criticise, I am not the best writer there is, but like Manahil said, grammar, characters. Your environment. How does it look where you live, where your parents live, for example. What the ADDA looks like, what kind of people visit it, only men, woman? I am very curious, I would like to know this now? What kind of work does the parents do? What does the guy in the story look like? (read my Betrayal of The Innocent - part 1). :-)