Thanks Patrick. I've fixed them. Hope you enjoy Typotic!

Thanks!

No problem!

Interesting premise. I really liked the story. The only thing I'd think of doing is making sure you are using the right spelling and grammar. Other than that, this story is very good!

My goal was to try and create a story that made the audience think. I think that a story deserves to be thought-over even after you've finished reading it. How many times did it take people to realize the story behind 2001: A Space Odyssey? I'm glad that I let the audience have interest build up over time, but my goal was to make the audience think, ask questions, and come up with ideas behind the ending.

Why doesn't Jacob remember he's Lily?

A part of the reason why the ending is so vague is because the reveal of the ending is shocking. If you've seen Psycho, the ending is superb, but the reason why the reviewer Roger Ebert said it wasn't prefect was because the ending explained too much. The discussion that the viewers could have made to discover the ending was lost because it was explained too rapidly. I find endings that you have to think about and make predictions about more interesting. The father has some odd intentions, but it's useless to have a second part. There would be nothing to it.