Definitely potential, but far too much repetition. You use the word 'film' ten times in the first paragraph, and the phrase 'home alone film' (which doesn't make a whole lot of sense, in english) six times in the first paragraph.
You are setting some scenes and your exposition is pretty good, but i think you need to find some creative and different ways of saying certain things, rather than repeating the same words/phrases over and over which can be very distracting.
Hope that helps!
8 years ago